75. 把close改成closure。the …of 结构中间应该用名词。
76. 把followed改following。following在此做伴随状语，如果用followed做并列谓语必须
在此词前加and 。
77. 把in改成on。表示具体的一天的早上，下午，晚上用介词on。一般用in。
78. 把also改成and。also只是副词，不能连接两个谓语，而and是连词，可以起连词作用。
79. 在gouged 的后面加 by，表被动，“被火山熔岩凿出一个大峡谷”。
80. 去掉 north前的the。north在这里用作副词。
Part Ⅴ
Sample Writing
Dear Sir,
I am interested in your Master’s degree in Architecture, and wish to enter this
program in Fall of 2004. My academic background is as follows:
A citizen of the People’s Republic of China, I am 26 years old. In 1999, I graduated and earned a diploma from Hunan University with a major in Architecture. Hunan University is a key university in the Chinese educational system. There I have the chances to listen to many famous scientists’ report on the most advanced subjects. Most of the professors of my classes are authorities in this area. They taught me not only the knowledge but also the principle on how to be an excellent architect. Hunan University has a big library that houses millions of books, which gives me exhaustive new readings and information. I have made strong foundation on my major through the four-year study and I am the top student in my departmentIf I am lucky enough to advance my future study in your esteemed university, I will go on with my favorite field of Architecture. As I studied more on Architecture, I frequently found my k, nowledge confined. I realized I should pursue graduate study to broaden my views, to stimulate more original ideas, and to establish my own systematic way in design. In graduate study, I would like to devote more thoughts to Urban Design, Culture and Technology, Design Theories, and Computational Design.
Your early reply will be greatly appreciated.
Sincerely yours,
Yang Ming
75. 把close改成closure。the …of 结构中间应该用名词。
76. 把followed改following。following在此做伴随状语，如果用followed做并列谓语必须
在此词前加and 。
77. 把in改成on。表示具体的一天的早上，下午，晚上用介词on。一般用in。
78. 把also改成and。also只是副词，不能连接两个谓语，而and是连词，可以起连词作用。
79. 在gouged 的后面加 by，表被动，“被火山熔岩凿出一个大峡谷”。
80. 去掉 north前的the。north在这里用作副词。
Part Ⅴ
Sample Writing
Dear Sir,
I am interested in your Master’s degree in Architecture, and wish to enter this
program in Fall of 2004. My academic background is as follows:
A citizen of the People’s Republic of China, I am 26 years old. In 1999, I graduated and earned a diploma from Hunan University with a major in Architecture. Hunan University is a key university in the Chinese educational system. There I have the chances to listen to many famous scientists’ report on the most advanced subjects. Most of the professors of my classes are authorities in this area. They taught me not only the knowledge but also the principle on how to be an excellent architect. Hunan University has a big library that houses millions of books, which gives me exhaustive new readings and information. I have made strong foundation on my major through the four-year study and I am the top student in my departmentIf I am lucky enough to advance my future study in your esteemed university, I will go on with my favorite field of Architecture. As I studied more on Architecture, I frequently found my k, nowledge confined. I realized I should pursue graduate study to broaden my views, to stimulate more original ideas, and to establish my own systematic way in design. In graduate study, I would like to devote more thoughts to Urban Design, Culture and Technology, Design Theories, and Computational Design.
Your early reply will be greatly appreciated.
Sincerely yours,
Yang Ming
75. 把close改成closure。the …of 结构中间应该用名词。
76. 把followed改following。following在此做伴随状语，如果用followed做并列谓语必须
在此词前加and 。
77. 把in改成on。表示具体的一天的早上，下午，晚上用介词on。一般用in。
78. 把also改成and。also只是副词，不能连接两个谓语，而and是连词，可以起连词作用。
79. 在gouged 的后面加 by，表被动，“被火山熔岩凿出一个大峡谷”。
80. 去掉 north前的the。north在这里用作副词。
Part Ⅴ
Sample Writing
Dear Sir,
I am interested in your Master’s degree in Architecture, and wish to enter this
program in Fall of 2004. My academic background is as follows:
A citizen of the People’s Republic of China, I am 26 years old. In 1999, I graduated and earned a diploma from Hunan University with a major in Architecture. Hunan University is a key university in the Chinese educational system. There I have the chances to listen to many famous scientists’ report on the most advanced subjects. Most of the professors of my classes are authorities in this area. They taught me not only the knowledge but also the principle on how to be an excellent architect. Hunan University has a big library that houses millions of books, which gives me exhaustive new readings and information. I have made strong foundation on my major through the four-year study and I am the top student in my departmentIf I am lucky enough to advance my future study in your esteemed university, I will go on with my favorite field of Architecture. As I studied more on Architecture, I frequently found my k, nowledge confined. I realized I should pursue graduate study to broaden my views, to stimulate more original ideas, and to establish my own systematic way in design. In graduate study, I would like to devote more thoughts to Urban Design, Culture and Technology, Design Theories, and Computational Design.
Your early reply will be greatly appreciated.
Sincerely yours,
Yang Ming
